That's looking better, although still a little rough round the edges.
1. Make sure you don't forget to put distributor and studio idents in at the start.
2. I like the opening shot and lines; you will need to rebalance the sound between the dialogue and the music to make sure that the dialogue in the next shot is the same volume.
3. Your cutaways to the past at around the 20s markmight be better treated in some way (e.g. black and white or slightly desaturated?) to demonstrate that they are in a different time-frame to the other sequence. Your editing of this part needs to be a lot slicker, particularly the point where the girl falls at about 23s.
4. You could probably do with coming into the scene in the tent (around 26s) a little earlier, with a fade?
5. The random shots of people running need to be looked at (some sort of audio sting coupled with treatment of the image would help here, I think).
6. The shot at 41s of the girl walking past the fence is a little weird...
You've got something resembling a rough cut now; I would think about getting it to a point where you have the full length trailer in draft by the end of the term. You should also have drafts of your poster and magazine cover by then.
That's looking better, although still a little rough round the edges.
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2. I like the opening shot and lines; you will need to rebalance the sound between the dialogue and the music to make sure that the dialogue in the next shot is the same volume.
3. Your cutaways to the past at around the 20s markmight be better treated in some way (e.g. black and white or slightly desaturated?) to demonstrate that they are in a different time-frame to the other sequence. Your editing of this part needs to be a lot slicker, particularly the point where the girl falls at about 23s.
4. You could probably do with coming into the scene in the tent (around 26s) a little earlier, with a fade?
5. The random shots of people running need to be looked at (some sort of audio sting coupled with treatment of the image would help here, I think).
6. The shot at 41s of the girl walking past the fence is a little weird...
You've got something resembling a rough cut now; I would think about getting it to a point where you have the full length trailer in draft by the end of the term. You should also have drafts of your poster and magazine cover by then.
By the way, I posted a load of horror movie posters on my blog for you to have a look at.
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