The balance between the music and the dialogue is a little off - you need to turn the music down at the start.
You also need to tighten up the cuts/ fades. I would fade through black for the credits (i.e. fade out then in). Also fade the diegtic sound in so it doesn't sound so harsh. This goes for whenever you have a fade through black (Which you need to use).
You also need to balance the sound (for example, at 0:34, gets louder). Definitely fade through black.
When the creepy stuff happens (for example, around 0:48s) I think you need some sort of creepy noise to emphasise it.
Again, at about 0:54, you need to fade in both audio and video. And again, you need to balance the sound (the dialogue gets louder and then quieter depending upon where you have the camera - you need to adjust this on your timeline).
The shot of the couple at about 1:02 seems to start too late. Again, this should be faded in. And out (video and audio).
As with the idea before, when you get the black-and-white scenes, you should have some sort of "horror movie" noise, in order to emphasise the shock value of these moments. For example, the scream at 1:10
The voice-over which begins at about 1:06 does not seem particularly clear. The sequence with the voice-over needs to be more tightly edited (there are a couple of shots - for example, the girl in the tent - which last too long). You also need to think about what audio you are going to use (it is inconsistent to have sound for some shots and not for others). You also seem to have some "glitchy" background noise at about 1:17 or so.
You have a fair few black frames - are these for credits or something? The back end (last 30s or so) seems to be all over the place.
I would be tempted to suggest re-editing the voice-over so that it appears throughout the trailer (So, for example, start the trailer with "There was once a girl called Ruby" and seed the rest of it through the entire trailer, in order to hang it together.
The credit at the end does not really work (watch it, you'll see what I mean). You also need a trailer-credit page (watch some trailers to see what I mean).
At the moment, I would put this at the bottom of L3, mainly because the camera-work is pretty good. However, the editing is weak (too many sloppy joins) and the sound lacks finish. There is also the issue of the credits, which need to be tightened up. I don't think you need to shoot anything else, you just need to package what you have a little more tightly.
The balance between the music and the dialogue is a little off - you need to turn the music down at the start.
ReplyDeleteYou also need to tighten up the cuts/ fades. I would fade through black for the credits (i.e. fade out then in). Also fade the diegtic sound in so it doesn't sound so harsh. This goes for whenever you have a fade through black (Which you need to use).
You also need to balance the sound (for example, at 0:34, gets louder). Definitely fade through black.
When the creepy stuff happens (for example, around 0:48s) I think you need some sort of creepy noise to emphasise it.
Again, at about 0:54, you need to fade in both audio and video. And again, you need to balance the sound (the dialogue gets louder and then quieter depending upon where you have the camera - you need to adjust this on your timeline).
The shot of the couple at about 1:02 seems to start too late. Again, this should be faded in. And out (video and audio).
As with the idea before, when you get the black-and-white scenes, you should have some sort of "horror movie" noise, in order to emphasise the shock value of these moments. For example, the scream at 1:10
The voice-over which begins at about 1:06 does not seem particularly clear. The sequence with the voice-over needs to be more tightly edited (there are a couple of shots - for example, the girl in the tent - which last too long). You also need to think about what audio you are going to use (it is inconsistent to have sound for some shots and not for others). You also seem to have some "glitchy" background noise at about 1:17 or so.
You have a fair few black frames - are these for credits or something? The back end (last 30s or so) seems to be all over the place.
I would be tempted to suggest re-editing the voice-over so that it appears throughout the trailer (So, for example, start the trailer with "There was once a girl called Ruby" and seed the rest of it through the entire trailer, in order to hang it together.
The credit at the end does not really work (watch it, you'll see what I mean). You also need a trailer-credit page (watch some trailers to see what I mean).
At the moment, I would put this at the bottom of L3, mainly because the camera-work is pretty good. However, the editing is weak (too many sloppy joins) and the sound lacks finish. There is also the issue of the credits, which need to be tightened up. I don't think you need to shoot anything else, you just need to package what you have a little more tightly.